And if his face is being shaded from the top by his hair his hair shouldn't have
shadows that intense on the tips of his hair. Or anywhere on his hair for that
matter. Everywhere else on him indicates lighting from above. And the shadows on
the hair just kinda makes your brain think whoa! what's going on there?.
His face also has a bit of a glazed look on it. Not much expression there. Hell,
even a slight swoop of the eyebrows would be a huge improvement. You really need
expression, though. Without it the picture has no personality. He goes from
brave adventurer to some doodle on a paper, all on the basis of expression.
So just soften up the shadows on his hair and maybe move them (the shadows) to
the underside of his hair next time. You also really need to give him more
expression. It's like he's been hypnotized by some sinister mouse with big ears
Other than that, though, your picture looks really good. Nice proportioning and
forshortening. Good clean shading, and, if I may say so, your cross hatching is
worlds better than mine
Despite the colors it still looks a bit flat. Maybe if you worked on the shadows
for the wings it'd look better. Because if his wings are curved in front of him
that much there should be some more intense shadows closer to his body. Unless
of course his wings are just contracted......hmmmm......well in any case that's
one suggestion.
The anatomy also looks a bit off. His collar bones are each a different length,
and that just looks weird. I recomend fixing it next time (I know how hard
pastels are to deal with so I wouldn't recomend trying to fix it this time )
So just fix the collar bones, maybe work on your proportioning on the arms, and
work on those wing shadows and he'd be one sexy beast
I know that's what you were saying before but this is different.
Since they're the only ones there you should have made them interacting in some
way. Then it would have looked just fine without a background, because there'd
be a purpose. Since they're just standing there it looks like it should be interperative (like abstract art)
but there's nothing else there to interperate so it feels kinda boring and
slightly confusing.
Remember that whoever looks at your 'ART' should be able to tell what it's about
without explanation (the same, however, doesn't apply to drawings, sketches). If
and explanation is needed it becomes nothing more than an illustration and
looses all artistic meaning.
Other than that it looks good...except for the stripes on her stockings.
Remember that as you move away from your designated horizon line the elipses
(half/part circles) become more exagerated. I.E. as you move down from the top
of her stockings the arcs should become more intense (ex. _ to U).
I know I'm a bit of a vulture when it comes to this stuff, but it's only because
I care. So don't take it personally. I do it to everyone
The only thing I can honestly say looks off is the depth. They look kind of like
they're standing 'in the wall' and the radio doesn't have any dimension.
It's also very flat. Not a whole lot of variance in the angle of presentation.
It all just kinda faces forward, and that's a bit boring. But if say you were to
mayber turn the sterio to the side a little bit and provide some more dynamic
shading on the characters it'd look a lot mor dimensional and 3D. Plus it'd be
more interesting to look at
And her right knee, too. Because of the way you placed the shadow her knee looks
more like the back of her leg.
I use pencils and I still can't do that kind of a job without erasing.
I also like the originality. There's so much fan art these days it's hard to
tell what's original anymore.
However, I unfortunately can't let you go without a little critisizem
His sword looks really, really, really, really (52 "really's"
later...) really curved for a samurai sword. I would suggest straightening it
Your forshortening, You know, when something is coming at you, in the picture,
is a little off. He looks kinda like he's turning his body and leaving his wings
behind.
And tell me if I'm wrong, but I thing that'd make for quite the flight into
battle (Darth Vader comes to mind here.....).
So, the key points are make his sword less curved, and position his wings so they look like they're
attatched to him (i.e. the right wing should
look like it's coming at you).
Other than those you did a stupendiously splendiferous job and should keep up
the good work
The only thing I can suggest is making the shot of her more dynamic. You know,
like a 30 degree angle or 45 degree angle instead of a straight on.
Don't get me wrong. Straight ons are fine (that's actually about all I can draw
right now ) but it's sooo much more interesting to look at a
photo/picture/drawing/sketch/image/compilation of pixals/etc. if it's at an
angle.
Other than that it looks fine. Also, don't beat yourself up over the artifacts
thing. All artists see every mistake in their work because they made them. But
like my art teacher said they're not 'mistakes' but 'events'.
This takes away the negative connotation and helps reduce your expectations of
yourself. And if you can get rid of those expectations you'll create far better
art.
OK, I'm done on my soap box now
And unlike previous posters I will not hesitate to say that I think bonded girls
are HOT!
Not bad. better than my drawings so far
Though I'll have to say the neck looks kinda like it's getting vacuumed up into
his head.
Maybe just widen the top of the neck a bit.
And his hands look slightly missproportioned. (i.e. they're too small)
Remember that hands are nearly as big as their host's face. This can vary just
like any other part of the body (people aren't perfect after all) but that's a
general rule I go by.
So, I think if you were to make the hands slightly larger and widen the neck at
the top a bit more it would be one kick ass picture.
Hope I helped (and if you think this is a harsh review you haven't seen me pick
apart my own work, LOL, it's worse than Ebert and Roper reviewing a movie )
Good dramatic shading. Though I do have to wonder where all of the anatomy went.
I mean I know she's strapped into a leather/steel coccoon/mummy thing but it
looks somehow off. She's got huge shoulders and then....nothing else. I mean her
shoulders compared to the rest of her body are huge. Then again maybe I'm just
not looking at it right. Anywho, that's all I have to say.
feels like there are too many shadows.
And if his face is being shaded from the top by his hair his hair shouldn't have shadows that intense on the tips of his hair. Or anywhere on his hair for that matter. Everywhere else on him indicates lighting from above. And the shadows on the hair just kinda makes your brain think whoa! what's going on there?.
His face also has a bit of a glazed look on it. Not much expression there. Hell, even a slight swoop of the eyebrows would be a huge improvement. You really need expression, though. Without it the picture has no personality. He goes from brave adventurer to some doodle on a paper, all on the basis of expression.
So just soften up the shadows on his hair and maybe move them (the shadows) to the underside of his hair next time. You also really need to give him more expression. It's like he's been hypnotized by some sinister mouse with big ears
Other than that, though, your picture looks really good. Nice proportioning and forshortening. Good clean shading, and, if I may say so, your cross hatching is worlds better than mine
Keep up the good work
Pretty good.
Despite the colors it still looks a bit flat. Maybe if you worked on the shadows for the wings it'd look better. Because if his wings are curved in front of him that much there should be some more intense shadows closer to his body. Unless of course his wings are just contracted......hmmmm......well in any case that's one suggestion.
The anatomy also looks a bit off. His collar bones are each a different length, and that just looks weird. I recomend fixing it next time (I know how hard pastels are to deal with so I wouldn't recomend trying to fix it this time
)
So just fix the collar bones, maybe work on your proportioning on the arms, and work on those wing shadows and he'd be one sexy beast
Keep up the good work
A bit sterile in my mind.
I know that's what you were saying before but this is different.
Since they're the only ones there you should have made them interacting in some way. Then it would have looked just fine without a background, because there'd be a purpose. Since they're just standing there it looks like it should be interperative (like abstract art) but there's nothing else there to interperate so it feels kinda boring and slightly confusing.
Remember that whoever looks at your 'ART' should be able to tell what it's about without explanation (the same, however, doesn't apply to drawings, sketches). If and explanation is needed it becomes nothing more than an illustration and looses all artistic meaning.
Other than that it looks good...except for the stripes on her stockings. Remember that as you move away from your designated horizon line the elipses (half/part circles) become more exagerated. I.E. as you move down from the top of her stockings the arcs should become more intense (ex. _ to U).
I know I'm a bit of a vulture when it comes to this stuff, but it's only because I care. So don't take it personally. I do it to everyone
Keep up the awesome work
DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMN!
I wish I had that kind of skill
The only thing I can honestly say looks off is the depth. They look kind of like they're standing 'in the wall' and the radio doesn't have any dimension.
It's also very flat. Not a whole lot of variance in the angle of presentation. It all just kinda faces forward, and that's a bit boring. But if say you were to mayber turn the sterio to the side a little bit and provide some more dynamic shading on the characters it'd look a lot mor dimensional and 3D. Plus it'd be more interesting to look at
And her right knee, too. Because of the way you placed the shadow her knee looks more like the back of her leg.
Other than that it looks good
Keep up the good work
That's pretty good
I use pencils and I still can't do that kind of a job without erasing.
I also like the originality. There's so much fan art these days it's hard to tell what's original anymore.
However, I unfortunately can't let you go without a little critisizem
His sword looks really, really, really, really (52 "really's" later...) really curved for a samurai sword. I would suggest straightening it
Your forshortening, You know, when something is coming at you, in the picture, is a little off. He looks kinda like he's turning his body and leaving his wings behind.
And tell me if I'm wrong, but I thing that'd make for quite the flight into battle (Darth Vader comes to mind here.....).
So, the key points are make his sword less curved, and position his wings so they look like they're attatched to him (i.e. the right wing should look like it's coming at you).
Other than those you did a stupendiously splendiferous job and should keep up the good work
Did you really draw her yourself?
Man, if you did, I wish I had your skills
The only thing I can suggest is making the shot of her more dynamic. You know, like a 30 degree angle or 45 degree angle instead of a straight on.
Don't get me wrong. Straight ons are fine (that's actually about all I can draw right now
) but it's sooo much more interesting to look at a
photo/picture/drawing/sketch/image/compilation of pixals/etc. if it's at an
angle.
Other than that it looks fine. Also, don't beat yourself up over the artifacts thing. All artists see every mistake in their work because they made them. But like my art teacher said they're not 'mistakes' but 'events'. This takes away the negative connotation and helps reduce your expectations of yourself. And if you can get rid of those expectations you'll create far better art.
OK, I'm done on my soap box now
And unlike previous posters I will not hesitate to say that I think bonded girls are HOT!
Later, and keep the good work coming
You pretty much nailed the two biggest things on the head.
Though I will have to say her left arm looks a bit drawn out. Like a rubber spaghetti noodle. The front half is a lot longer than the back half.
Other than that it's pretty good for one you did when you were younger.
Keep up the good work
Not bad. better than my drawings so far Though I'll have to say the neck looks kinda like it's getting vacuumed up into his head.
Maybe just widen the top of the neck a bit.
And his hands look slightly missproportioned. (i.e. they're too small)
Remember that hands are nearly as big as their host's face. This can vary just like any other part of the body (people aren't perfect after all) but that's a general rule I go by.
So, I think if you were to make the hands slightly larger and widen the neck at the top a bit more it would be one kick ass picture.
Hope I helped
(and if you think this is a harsh review you haven't seen me pick
apart my own work, LOL, it's worse than Ebert and Roper reviewing a movie 
)
Love it dude.
Has anyone else noticed that Itachi is a left handed swordsman. Or at least that's the way he draws.........
Good dramatic shading. Though I do have to wonder where all of the anatomy went. I mean I know she's strapped into a leather/steel coccoon/mummy thing but it looks somehow off. She's got huge shoulders and then....nothing else. I mean her shoulders compared to the rest of her body are huge. Then again maybe I'm just not looking at it right. Anywho, that's all I have to say.